i really enjoyed reading this but i was difficult to read. so, and i hope you don't mind, i 'edited' your story a little just to make it easier to read. i only changed paragraphs and some crazy comma usage :P
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Haha, I appreciate the rewrite. Mostly I'll use the line break changes; a lot of the comma usage was intentional, and seriously changes the meaning and cadence when altered. Also, the unbroken paragraph was intended to induce a streamlined train of thought similar to Lucere's circumstances in a dangerous situation.
I was really looking for feedback on the premise of character biographies, and whether this would be a correct use of them though. Was interested in what extent existing lore could be woven into playerbase contributions without tearing the fabric of the storyline. Also curious as to the consensus on bio length; I didn't know whether or not full narrative excerpts of a character's life experiences are acceptable, or should rather be limited to a few simple lines.
Furthermore, if there's no general standard on the character bio's purpose, I was wondering exactly how tolerant admins would be with players submitting 10K+ word back-stories to give their online role more depth. Sometimes server databases don't like huge amounts of text, and if there's one thing you don't do in a game, it's aggravate the system support staff. :P
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Haha, I appreciate the rewrite. Mostly I'll use the line break changes; a lot of the comma usage was intentional, and seriously changes the meaning and cadence when altered. Also, the unbroken paragraph was intended to induce a streamlined train of thought similar to Lucere's circumstances in a dangerous situation.
I was really looking for feedback on the premise of character biographies, and whether this would be a correct use of them though. Was interested in what extent existing lore could be woven into playerbase contributions without tearing the fabric of the storyline. Also curious as to the consensus on bio length; I didn't know whether or not full narrative excerpts of a character's life experiences are acceptable, or should rather be limited to a few simple lines.
Furthermore, if there's no general standard on the character bio's purpose, I was wondering exactly how tolerant admins would be with players submitting 10K+ word back-stories to give their online role more depth. Sometimes server databases don't like huge amounts of text, and if there's one thing you don't do in a game, it's aggravate the system support staff. :P