ROLEPLAY

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at this point these two stories are now complete, but fear not my friends because the over all stories of the upper branches is only started, there's much more to come, the next chapters of the greater story will come out as each chapter of these two have, every week there will be a chapter posted. i still await any offical kind of response from the dev's about the upper branches ideas, and what or if anything will be considered. the time it's taken to post all of this story has been provided to give the dev's time to work, but with lack of contact of any sort, it's quite possible that i've wasted much time with this , both in the planing and the time to slowly trickle out the the stories a chapter at a time. i expect that still another few months are needed to tell the whole story, and what's been wrote here is but the first installment of what's a much longer and larger over-all story.

basically, don't be in a hurry to forget what you've read here, in just a few days you'll be seeing yet another part of the upper branches stories, as this is only the start (remember it's close to 20k words worth of stories, and this was but half of that)

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100% OOC post of course, but i didn't know where to post that so sorry to pollute the thread with that :)


Frankly, I didn't have a lot of things to do, so i decided to read your story ...
A little thing about the content : even if Icus doesn't agree to what you say, as long as it's only your personal saying, well you can do it. And you already adressed the issues with your theory if "those against", even if in this case the style is really, really strange (seriously, a text written by "the government and wise homin" together ? Like it's some sort of conspiracy and they meet each other to speak about some drunken Zorai theory ?)

So, for the style now. First of all, use your caps key, please. There is literally no phrase who begins by a capital in your text. Not a single one, and it's a pain in the ass to read :X
Second, there is a lot of typos and/or mistakes in your text ... I have wrote down only some of them, because I found them funny.

First of all, in almost every chapter, you can find that :I never knew the scrolls were secretly sponsorized by the Seamstresses' Guild !

Chapter 1 :This is the first line, of the first post, and there is already a kinda-huge mistake (make should be may). Definitively not serious ...
chapter 5I wonder what does tyrtinists looks like ... Are they Followers of the Great Tyrtin ?
chapter 7Are you sure it ain't homin ?So, reason has a reason ? Wonderful !
Chapter 11Dunno, it's pretty rainy here at the moment

Anyway, finding the text bad or good is more or less subjective, so i won't go further into this. But for the love of good, please read over your text before publishing them.

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(( I can't figure if that "your" is an honest mistake or intentional :D ))

Well this is completely ridiculous. One of the reasons for removing my post was I was told it wasn't RP. So I expect Icus' post to be removed as well as it doesn't contain RP? No of course not. GMs start growing up, stop acting childish and get rid of your complete bias towards favoring some players.

Also Icus your post is completely riddled with grammar mistakes so stop being so completely hypocritical and if you are going to point out people's grammar mistakes in the future- at least have the sense to make sure your post doesn't have any. Idiot.

EDIT 1: Just to say the phrase "grammer nazi" is a commonly used phrase even used in the telegraph- a newspaper reaching millions. Why my post was removed I have no idea.

EDIT 2: My comment about GMs growing up and stop having bias towards some players is not attributed to this post- but instead to the treatment my friends and I have received over the last 4 years.

There is literally no phrase WHICH begins by a capital .... I have WRITTEN down only some of them ...

Quite honestly, Icus ... that/you is/are pathetic!

Nuff said ...

Seralee :-)

BOOM!!!