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[Zorai]Assemblies of the Circles of the Theocracy in Zora and Hoi-Cho

Atys'ata, Awakened Fey-Lin Liang,

So you are ignoring my questions again as I can see - this time it's the one about the "aim" that Assemblies should have. And once again you solely express your displeasure and point out mistakes, just as usual. I wonder if there is anything that will ever suit you; except for your own opinions and habits of course?

I am rather sad that you view my honest words and questions as some kind of accusation. Instead I thought you might appreciate it if someone dared to openly voice the impressions one might very easily get about your intentions. Not only when reading your suggestions for Assemblies of the Circles of course, but also by taking the imperious words into consideration that you have repreatedly used when talking to others up until now.

Oh yes, I should definitely rewrite some things; you are absolutely right.

a) there is in fact something missing in this sentences: "First of all you cannot order our Grand Sage Mabreka Cho where he should sit, neither our respected Sages! It doesn't surprise me that you would like to so nonetheless...".

It should be corrected to: "First of all you cannot order our Grand Sage Mabreka Cho where to sit, neither our respected Sages. It doesn't surprise me that you would like to do so nonetheless...".

Unfortunately the "do" was missing in the second sentence, I have to apologize for that.

b) yes, that sentence should be corrected as well: "It especially gives the Awakened more of a special space than now as I can see - what a coincidence that you yourself are an Awakened, no?".

I think it would sound better if phrased like this: "This especially provides the Awakened with a more outstanding position as it is now - what a coincidence that you yourself are an Awakened, no?"

c) unfortunately there are errors in this sentence as well: "Could it be you are so used to being the Orator for your city, Awakene Fey-Lin Liang, that you want to lead also the national Assemblies now and be able to command others if or when to speak like the Akenak enjoys doing?"

It should rather be: "Could it be that you have accustomed so much to being the Orator for your city, Awakened Fey-Lin Liang, that you now want to lead the national Assemblies as well and wish to command others if or when to speak, just like some Akenak enjoy doing?".

I have to apologize for leaving out the "d" when writing "Awakened".

to be continued...

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